I am exited to see you add detail about the main events Kataraina. It sounds like you really had a blast! The best parts are where you show not tell how you feel i.e. wide eyes - showing your amazement and where you add description to the experience of going down. Next time don't make your text so small as its hard to read and take out your planning ' Event 1'. Keep up the good work
I am exited to see you add detail about the main events Kataraina. It sounds like you really had a blast! The best parts are where you show not tell how you feel i.e. wide eyes - showing your amazement and where you add description to the experience of going down. Next time don't make your text so small as its hard to read and take out your planning ' Event 1'. Keep up the good work
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